The following appeared in an editorial in the local newspaper of Workville.
"Workers should be allowed to reduce their workload from 40 to 25 or even 20 hours per week because it is clear that people who work part-time instead of full-time have better health and improved morale. One store in Workville, which began allowing its employees to work part-time last year, reports that fewer days of sick leave were taken last year than in previous years. In contrast, the factory in Workville, which does not allow any of its employees to work part-time, had a slight increase in the number of days of sick leave taken last year. In addition, a recent survey reports that most of the store employees stated that they are satisfied with their jobs, while many of the factory employees stated that they are dissatisfied with their jobs." [Argument Topic of GRE Writing, #51 of August 2006, #162 of GRE CAT Answers to the Real Essay Qeustions(Mark Alan Stewart, J. D.) and GRE Writing(Sun Yuan), #172 of GRE Writing 5.5 Argument (Li Jianlin)]
problems:
"One store in Workville, which began allowing its employees to work part-time last year, reports that fewer days of sick leave were taken last year than in previous years." What does the store sell? How long did the workers do last year? And how long did the workers do in the previous years? Was the work time reduced largely or little? Perhaps its empoyees had good health all the time. How many days of sick leave were taken? one day? two days? we have not exact data to determine the reduced workload have obvious effect.
"the factory in Workville, which does not allow any of its employees to work part-time, had a slight increase in the number of days of sick leave taken last year." What resulted in the slight increase in the number of days of sick leave? Flu did? Or just other epidemic ailment did? Slight increase meaned a bit so that no allowing part-time did not account for the increase. And the factory had not compared the part-time to the full time. In addition, only a factory did not have enough evidence to convince people.
"a recent survey reports that most of the store employees stated that they are satisfied with their jobs, while many of the factory employees stated that they are dissatisfied with their jobs." What caused that most of the employees was satisfied with their jobs in the store? Workload? Management? Salary? Securities?
"to reduce their workload from 40 to 25 or even 20 hours per week" have not? adequate data to bolster why it should be good to reduce the workload from 40 to 25 or even 20 hours per work.